mAnassarovar
SItala himAdri
tasya vyatta jaTA sprushati
saritAH pravahanti
Cold Ice capped mountain
His open matted hair brushes
Streams flow
Its beautiful to imagine how everything links to Siva and Sakti!
tasya vyatta jaTA sprushati
saritAH pravahanti
Cold Ice capped mountain
His open matted hair brushes
Streams flow
Its beautiful to imagine how everything links to Siva and Sakti!
Labels: haiku
posted by Sirisha @ 11/20/2006 03:50:00 PM
8 comments
8 Comments:
Really cool, but I would prefer
Sivasya SItala himAdri
tasya vyatta jaTA sprushati
nirmala saritA pravahanti
Just an improvisation :)
But, the point is .. sanskrit has myriad adjectives and maximum poetic liberty. Employ em!
Thanks Krishna. Point taken. However, the haiku should give you the feel of "nirmalatva" without actually saying it.
Even in the first line, if I alreday say Sivasya, what's left for the reader to deduce!
Remember, use few adjectives in haikus.
Yes, I guess your knowhow of Haiku is superior!
Good work keep them coming, I have uploaded some cool vids and made a few posts on my blog, check them out, when you are free!
hey I like the way you worded that.
those simple lines made me happy and I completely knew what you meant.
supercool. can I link you from my blog?
Sure, you can link it.
what is "nirmalatva"???? explain?
nirmalatva means untouched by impurity, cleanse, with clarity.
hi sirisha...ur thoughts are too good..i wish that would be more clear if it is written in telugu ...i hope u know telugu....if not pls ignore this comment...
deepthi
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